This snippet is from my work in progress, ALL THAT GLITTERS. Annie, the main character, is a perfectionist, who always strives to make her holiday celebrations something even Martha Stewart would envy. Over the course of the story, Annie's various relatives move into her house, disrupting her perfect little world.
This scene takes place on Easter morning between Annie and her uncle:
"Who are the masters?"
Milt shook his head as if he couldn't believe her question, but he stayed focused on his task of pushing the couch until it sat directly in front of the television. "The Masters, you know, golf."
"Are you saying you invited the bar crowd to watch golf here today, Easter Sunday?"
Milt shrugged as he nudged one of the chairs closer to the couch. "Is that a problem?"
Hmmm... I think Annie's stress level just spiked.
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I'd love to hear from you about this excerpt! What would you do if you found out Easter morning you'd be entertaining a group of strangers from the pub?
80 comments:
Is that a problem? Golf? On Easter Sunday? Just wondering...does Uncle Milt routinely invite people over without asking first or is this new? I'm curious to see what Annie does, if anything, to please the golf crowd. Great six!
LOL! I'd say it's a problem indeed! Poor Annie! I'd be having a fit in the middle of a meltdown! This sounds like a really funny story. :)
And thanks so much for the mention! Oh, and I love your new blog background - it's got gorgeous colours! xoxo
OMG, what a horrible house guest! My stress level would spike too! Great 6!
Lovely six! In answer to your question, I think I'd go mental. Not that I have a short fuse or anything, but that's a bit much for anyone, I reckon.
LOL...sounds like it might be a problem. Awesome 6
Great six, Lorraine! Had to laugh, at first I thought the Masters might be supernatural beings...in some camps maybe they are;-) My DH has been watching a lot of golf lately, but fortunately alone;-)
Honestly? I'd kick him back OUT. lol I feel for her. She's in a tough position. Let him stay and be "nice" or take her house back. Nice six.
LOL -- ya gotta love the clueless guy. Of course, he probably considers golf a religion! Fun six. :)
Yep, I think I'd be more than a little upset! Poor Annie. I'd be interested to see how she handles this problem. We are always taught to respect our elders, but her uncle should respect her too! Great six!
Methinks Annie is going to go ballistic (I would!) and Milt hasn't a clue. This sounds like a lot of fireworks in the making. Great six, Lorraine. And I love your snazzy new blog background! :)
LOL Love it.
Ugh! That would spike my stress level too! Nothing like a crowd without any warning! Great six Lorraine!
Oh, man, that would be grounds for homicide in my household! Fun six, Lorraine. :)
@_@ golf! House guests are bad but one with a fixation on golf! Poor poor Annie.
A beer swilling, golf loving, male crowd is NOT my idea of company. AND he's moving the furniture. How is he not dead yet?
(FYI, thanks for leaving a comment on my six last week. I really appreciate your feedback.)
I'd be ready for a few beers myself. Nice six!
Oh, Lorraine! Not only has he invited his cronies over but he's rearranging her furniture?!? This scene is just wonderful! Terrific six and poor Annie. Uncle Milt would be toast at my house.
Problem?! I'd go yank out the cable from the outside!
'Course,half my family is watching the Cubs and the Nationals right now, but only until the Easter Egg hunt starts . . .
LOL. Golf isn't a problem in our house... it is on the TV right now. And, yes, this is new for Uncle Milt, he's never invited anyone over before - so that he chose Easter to do this isn't sitting well with Annie. :)
Thanks, Zee. :) Annie does have her share of challenges when her family arrives.
I was having fun playing new backgrounds for my blog.
Thanks, Angela. Uncle Milt isn't making things easy. LOL
LOL. Thanks, Karen.
Thanks, Christine! :)
LOL. My DH is also watching golf, and thankfully also without buddies... I'm in the living room too, but only look up when there is a big roar. :)
:) Yes, Annie is having some issues balancing her family's actions with how she envisions things should be. LOL
Thanks, Donna. Milt is a bit oblivious, isn't he? :)
Thanks, Chantel. :) Annie is in a bit of a dilemma - she is focussed on having her family with her, but the reality isn't working out as smoothly as she'd expected.
Thanks, Mae! I'm happy with my blog background too (ah, the things I do when I procrastinate...)
Annie has her hands full, that's for sure. :)
Thank you, D'Ann! :)
Thanks, Candice! I think some people would probably love a surprise party, Annie (and me) not so much. LOL
LOL. Thanks, Siobhan!
LOL. Yes, poor Annie. :)
Thanks, Monica! I'm pretty sure Annie has the same opinion of the crowd as you! :)
There's an idea! :) If you can't beat 'em, join 'em...
Thank you, Silver! LOL. Uncle Milt is pushing it, isn't he? :)
I guess that's one way to put an end to Milt's plans. LOL.
An Easter Egg hunt sounds fun! Maybe Annie could try to get all the men outside for one... that'd be interesting. :)
I love how it's topical! The only Easter Sunday reference I've seen in today's sixers :)
I think so too, lol! Great six! Thanks!
I foresee a confrontation in Milt's future, the only question being before or after the golf game! Fun six!
Mine would have too, the my boot would have been attached to Milt's backside as I shoved him out the door. LOL Great six. Happy Easter
Oh my! The stress involving family and then adding a layer of them moving in! Are these in-laws? Your characters are asking for trouble. LOL.
Oh my! The stress of family + adding layer of them moving in! Your characters are asking for trouble!
LOL! Spiked? Yeah, I'd say so... ;)
Hee. Sounds like my relatives. The story sounds fabulous, too. :-)
Love it - everyone has their own priorities and it's good that she learns she is not perfect. And thanks for the delightful comment on my snippet :D
Escape, escape, escape, that would be going through my head, lol. Well done!
I imagine she could find a few Martha Stewartly uses for golf clubs right about then.
Wow, that would definitely stress me out. Great six! :)
Don't you just love relatives who are oblivious? Good luck to Annie! Happy Easter!
LOL, does this guy have a death wish? I think so... :)
Kate, I can't seem to open your blog today. I'll try checking out your six again later and maybe it'll work...
Thanks, Skye!
Thanks, Jennifer!
Thanks, Lynne!
LOL. Thanks, Heather. Happy Easter to you too!
LOL. Yes, Annie's stress and family members just keep coming... :)
Yes, poor Annie. :)
Thank you so much, Jean Marie! :)
Yes, it is a tough lesson for Annie, but she'll be okay in the end. ;)
And, you are welcome!
LOL. Thanks, Vivien!
True - Annie is very creative! ;)
Thanks, Jessica!
Yes, I think Annie may need some luck!
Happy Easter to you too! :)
LOL. :)
Ohhhh, that sounds like a problem.
Great six! Love this. Too funny! And so true. Holidays never turn out the way you expect. Golf was on here today, too, but at least no one moving furniture around :)
I can't help but wonder what the rest of the relatives are up to.
I'd have to kill him...Easter or no Easter! He could have at least warned her... :)
I host every holiday, and I'll tell you, my stress level just spiked FOR her. I will say, at least they sound like a laid back group, LOL. (She must have the patience of saint!)
This was a really fun excerpt. Since all my hubby watched all day today was golf, I can relate. No pub goers though. Phew.
Not the Easter she envisioned. Feels real. A lot of women would get upset about this.
Yes, I think Annie would agree... :)
Thanks, Karyn! Annie's holiday are never quite the way she envisions... :)
They are still sleeping - blissfully unaware. Milt and Annie are early risers.
Yes. It is quite the surprise, hey? :)
Hosting every holiday must keep you busy!
Milt is laid back... not so sure about Annie. LOL.
Thanks, Tanya! Golf was on here today... and no pub goers either. LOL
Thank you so much, Cara! :)
What a wonderful snippet. Isn't it funny how differently men equate the holidays? Loved it.
Ha! Golf? Easter Sunday? Oh my heavens no.
You did such an incredible job of conveying information in this six, Lorraine. Her perfectionism for holidays is tunnel vision. Clueless to the "Masters".
Good show of your talent :-)
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