Saturday, April 14, 2012

Six Sentence Sunday - All That Glitters #2

This snippet is from my work in progress, ALL THAT GLITTERS.  (Other snippets from this story can be found here.)  

Introduction to these sentences: This is the first time Annie sees Quinn, the hero of the story.  Driving on country roads for the first time, Annie loses control of her truck and drives into the ditch.  Quinn sees her accident, so he stops to help.  She is physically fine, and takes a minute to evaluate her would-be rescuer.

Here are the six:

          Annie assessed the man standing on the road in a quick beat - his baseball cap had probably been in service for the last fifteen years, his faded jeans fit snugly over lean hips, and the creases around his eyes suggested he'd spent his life squinting into the sun.  He was one of the sexiest men she'd ever seen outside of movies.

          And now he was focused on her. 

          When the corner of his mouth kicked up in a lopsided grin, heat rolled over her skin as if he'd caressed her.  Annie swallowed and looked away, mortified by her immediate heated response to him. 

          Maybe she was going through an early menopause.



Poor Annie!  Hoping for menopause instead of a sexual attraction.  ;)


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110 comments:

Donna Cummings said...

LOL -- this is great, especially her explanation for her heated reaction. He sounds yummy too. :)

Jessica Subject said...

What's wrong with being attracted to him?? A great six! :)

Jessica Subject said...

Why can't she be attracted to him? Great six! :)

Kate said...

Oh, Annie. I don't think it's menopause. LOL Great six, Lorraine!

Karyn Good said...

Great description. Loved the last line!

Carmen DeSousa said...

Ah, this is great!!!

Skye Warren said...

Oh, I love how he's all well-worn and yet so sexy. That's real life for you, and very hot!

Angela Quarles said...

Mmm, he sounds sexy as hell, and then I love her last line!

Jess Schira said...

He sounds like my kind of guy.

maeclair said...

Fun, flirty, sexy and steamy rolled into one. Yummy six!

Claire Gillian said...

This was really cute. I enjoyed your turns of phrases too.

Tonya Burrows said...

Ohh he sounds sexy!

Candice Bundy said...

Interesting how she immediately discounts her reaction to him. And yeah, he's quite the yummy catch, but it sounds like he'll have an uphill battle winning her over. Great six!

Sandra Sookoo said...

LOL sure she is! Loved the scene :-)

Cara Bristol said...

I LOVE this. Your description of him is fantastic, the way you worked in hints of his lifestyle, the worn cap, the eye creases -- as well as her response to him. Is she, by any chance, an "older" heroine (older than 40?). I wonder because of the reference to early menopause.

sue said...

excellent word usage - the last line threw me :D

Sue Ann Bowling said...

Loved the last line--and I, too, wondered about the ages of the protagonists.

Wildcats Wife said...

Definitely true romance, when the guy is so smitten by the woman, he forgets to ask if she's okay. Enchanting world you created. Love it and your description of his ball cap. Fun!!

DeAnna Felthauser said...

What a great six! You painted the picture of him perfectly and her thought about menopause had me giggling!

Paula Martin said...

Great six, love the description of him, and her reaction too!

Michelle Pickett said...

LOVED it. Especially the last line. Too funny.

Great job!
Michelle
www.michelle-pickett.com/blog

L.J. Kentowski said...

Oh, I just love that immediate attraction that is undeniable. I could feel the electricity from your six! Awesome!

Suzanne Stengl said...

love it. looking forward to more!

Lea Griffith said...

Love that line 'heat rolled over her skin'--great six! Can't wait to read next week's offering.

Teresa Cypher aka T K CypherBuss said...

Whew! This was hot, Lorraine! Excellent description... wow... wonderful! Last line--too funny!

Ursula Grey said...

Love your voice, Lorraine. This was a great six, each and every sentence:-) Well done!

Denny S. Bryce said...

Wow! Just good and intriguing six.and hell yes, he's hot.

Jennifer Lowery (Kamptner) said...

Yum! Love it! Great six!

diannehartsock said...

There's something so sexy about faded jeans on lean hips... I want to know more about him. ;)

Sandra Bunino said...

Those hot flashes can be kind of tricky! Super six!

A.S. Fenichel said...

I love a lopsided grin. Great six!

Elaine Cantrell said...

He can rescue me anytime!

Amy said...

Great six! The last line had me laughing out loud!!

Chantel Rhondeau said...

Oh - I love this description and her reactions! Great job! Tricky, those hot flashes!

As a side note, in the second-to-last paragraph you have 'heat' rolled over her and 'heated' response, so two heats close together. Might consider changing one of them to something else. But feel free to ignore!

I really like this six! He sounds yummy! ;-)

Ginger Simpson said...

Trust me, that isn't menopause. *lol* Great six, and very vivid emotions.

stephanielawton.com said...

*melts* Love the line about creases around the eyes from squinting into the sun. It speaks volumes about his character.

lovindanger said...

Wicked six! You leave the reader wanting more, especially of him:)

J.M. Blackman said...

I love her immediate response. Sometimes, it happens like that. And you portrayed it perfectly. I can't wait to see what happens next? Will he be just as struck? I hope so! :)

melyndaprice said...

LOL! The last line is fantastic :) Early menopause? What a fun and sexy six!

Siobhan Muir / Meg Palevich said...

I think I'd be panting with a hot flash, too! Nicely done, Lorraine. :)

Cherie Marks said...

Love it! Great use of humor with the menopause line. I like this character. Great six!

Sarah W said...

Verrry nice! And it says something about her life, that she's not happy about the attraction.

Jenna said...

Loved her swift evaluation of him. But somehow I don't think it's menopause, but something a whole lot nicer! Fun six!

Sarah Ballance said...

He totally reminds me of my husband (although his hats seldom last longer than a few months, they *look* years old, LOL!) I think she needs to brace herself for a wild ride (literally or otherwise, *grin*)

Casey said...

This book sounds like pure fun. I enjoyed your sample immensely.

Veronica Scott said...

Menopause would NOT be coming to my mind if that man was looking at me LOL! Terrific, vivid description of him - wow. Loved this six! Want more!

Joanne Stewart said...

Ohh, he sounds yummy! Terrific six!

Karysa Faire said...

Been in service for the last 15 years. . . fantastic description. Gave me an immediate visual.

I'm hoping she's NOT going through menopause. :-)

Zee Monodee said...

LOL! I doubt it's menopause! :) Don't you just love those moments, when you see a man who looks like he belongs on the silver screen, right there in front of you? :)

Ann Swann said...

To begin with, Annie is a rockin' name for your female protagonist, and the hero "spent his life squinting into the sun..." My kind of guy. Great 6!

Teresa Thomas Bohannon said...

Great scene. I really could see him and could definitely feel Annie.

K.E. Saxon said...

I loved the "menopause" line! Spot-on description of the hero--gave a great visual right off the bat. Likin' him, likin' her. Great six!!

Cate Masters said...

Poor Annie! She needs a shot of confidence. Hope he gives her one. :)

Karen de Lange said...

Yummy! He sounds just about perfect - lucky Annie!

Silver James said...

Wow! That's quite the reaction and I adore that last line! Of course, Quinn sounds delicious so I can understand her interest. ;)

patonlorraine said...

Thanks, Donna. :)

patonlorraine said...

Annie has plans and they don't include someone like Quinn (at this point, anyway). :)

patonlorraine said...

No, I don't think it is menopause either... LOL

patonlorraine said...

Thanks, Karyn! :)

patonlorraine said...

Thanks, Carmen! :)

patonlorraine said...

Thanks, Skye! I always loved Quinn, it is nice to hear others do too. :)

patonlorraine said...

Thanks, Angela! I'm glad he sounds sexy. :)

patonlorraine said...

LOL. Thanks, Silver!

patonlorraine said...

Thanks, Mae! :)

patonlorraine said...

Yes, Annie has some challenges with self-esteem and it taints her views of things a bit. :)

patonlorraine said...

Thank you, Cara! She is an "older" heroine... a little over 40.

patonlorraine said...

Thanks! Quinn is in his mid-thirties. Annie is in her early forties. :)

patonlorraine said...

Thanks! :)

patonlorraine said...

Thanks, Suzanne! :)

patonlorraine said...

He is pretty awesome (if I do say so myself - LOL)

patonlorraine said...

She does have some self-esteem issues... and he does help. :)

patonlorraine said...

Thanks! :) It is great to know they are likable!

patonlorraine said...

:)

patonlorraine said...

Thank you, Claire! :)

patonlorraine said...

I think so too. *grin*

patonlorraine said...

Thanks, Sandra! :)

patonlorraine said...

Thank you, Sue! I hope it threw you in a good way?!

patonlorraine said...

Thanks, DeAnna! :) I'm glad you giggled.

patonlorraine said...

Thank you, Paula! :)

patonlorraine said...

Thanks, Michelle! :)

patonlorraine said...

Yay! Thanks, L.J.! :)

patonlorraine said...

SSS really is a lot of fun!

patonlorraine said...

Thank you, Lea!

patonlorraine said...

Thank you, Teresa! I'm glad you liked it. :)

patonlorraine said...

Thank you so much, Ursula! That is so wonderful to hear! :)

patonlorraine said...

Thank you, Denny! *grin*

patonlorraine said...

Thank you, Jennifer! :)

patonlorraine said...

Thank you, Dianne! :)

patonlorraine said...

LOL. Thanks, Sandra!

patonlorraine said...

Thank you! :)

patonlorraine said...

Me too! :)

patonlorraine said...

LOL. Thanks, Amy!

patonlorraine said...

LOL. I think you are right, Ginger! :)

patonlorraine said...

Thanks, Stephanie! :)

patonlorraine said...

Thank you so much! :)

patonlorraine said...

Thank you, J.M.! :)

patonlorraine said...

Thank you, Melynda! :)

patonlorraine said...

Thank you, Siobhan! :)

patonlorraine said...

Thank you, Cherie! :)

patonlorraine said...

Thank you, Sarah! True, Annie has a few plans and Quinn isn't one of them (yet). :)

patonlorraine said...

Thank you, Jenna! I don't think it's menopause either. LOL

patonlorraine said...

LOL. Thanks, Sarah! :)

patonlorraine said...

Thank you, Casey! :)

patonlorraine said...

LOL! Thanks, Veronica! :)

patonlorraine said...

Thank you, Joanne! :)

patonlorraine said...

Thanks, Karysa! No, she's not going through menopause yet. LOL

patonlorraine said...

Thank you, Zee! I don't see too many... but I can imagine. ;)

patonlorraine said...

Thanks, Ann! :)

patonlorraine said...

Thank you, Teresa!

patonlorraine said...

I just found your comment in my spam file. Don't know why it went there. Oops. Anyway... Thank you! Good catch. I sometimes (always) tweak before I hit "publish" on my blog post and should really re-read again first. Sometimes you get a word that just tries to worm its way into every sentence, hey? (Or is that just me? LOL)

Thanks, Chantel! :)