Saturday, April 28, 2012

Six Sentence Sunday - All That Glitters #4

This snippet is from my work in progress, ALL THAT GLITTERS. (Other snippets from this story can be found here.)

Introduction to these sentences: This excerpt follows directly after my last SSS post. Driving on country roads for the first time, Annie loses control of her truck and drives into a ditch. Quinn sees her accident, so he stops to help. Both Annie and her truck are fine, but when she tries to get out of the truck, her door hits the steep slope of the ditch. She can't open the door wide enough to squeeze through - she's trapped. Quinn has just told her he'll pull her truck out of the ditch, and Annie has decided she wants out of the truck first. Quinn's suggested she crawl through the window, assuring her he'll make sure she doesn't fall.  Last time, when her foot gets caught on something, Annie looks down and realizes that her position, crawling on the seat toward him, is displaying her cleavage to Quinn. 

Here are the six:

          Her hand flew to her chest to clutch her shirt closed - albeit belatedly - as she kicked her foot to free it.  When the passenger side seatbelt flung against the far door with a clunk, Annie spared a glance at Quinn.  His gaze fixed on hers, as if he was struggling not to look lower.  His brown eyes were darker than a moment ago and he was grinning - yep, he'd seen straight down her shirt.  Some part of her was immensely relieved she'd grabbed her lacy bra that morning instead of the frayed sports one she usually wore. 
          The other part wished she'd worn a turtleneck.

Annie isn't out of the truck yet!  I think I'll post more excerpts from this scene over the next couple of Sundays, at least until Annie has two feet on the ground!

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Thank you for stopping by to read my Six Sentence Sunday post.  You are all wonderful!  I appreciate everyone's comments and ideas, so let me know what you think! :)

Thank you also to everyone who tracked down my post last week!  A little blogger glitch foiled my scheduling plans, so my post was up late.  Sorry! 

Check out the Six Sentence Sunday website to find links to more author blogs and snippets!  The other writers who participate in this are fabulous and talented too - so check them out!

103 comments:

Kylie Scott said...

Fun 6! Glad she had the lace on.

Ruthie Knox said...

Cute! But a turtleneck wouldn't be any fun.

Jessica Subject said...

LOL A great six! Sexual tension already. :)

Carmen DeSousa said...

LOL! As my grandmother always said, make sure you always have on clean undergarments in case you get in a wreck. I never understood why I'd care. Now I do! Looking forward to more. ;)

Donna Cummings said...

This made me laugh -- the last line is perfect. And I love that he's struggling not to look. LOL

patonlorraine said...

Thanks, Kylie! :)

patonlorraine said...

I agree, Ruthie, no fun at all. :)

patonlorraine said...

Thanks, Jessica! :)

stephanielawton.com said...

Aww, he was kind enough to stop and help -- the guy earned his little peek. :) You've done a great job of making us like both characters.

patonlorraine said...

LOL! Yes, my grandmother said the same thing.

patonlorraine said...

Thanks, Donna! :)

patonlorraine said...

Thanks, Stephanie! That is great to hear! :)

Kate said...

I love her mixed feelings about the eyeful she just gave him! Well done as always Lorraine.

Lisa Fox said...

Lol! What fun!

patonlorraine said...

Thank you, Kate! :)

patonlorraine said...

Thanks, Lisa! :)

Sandra Sookoo said...

lol just goes to show, always wear the good bra!

patonlorraine said...

LOL! True - you never know what the day will bring. :)

Lila Shaw said...

That was really cute! Love his grin. I'll be back next week!

patonlorraine said...

Thanks, Lila! :)

Karen de Lange said...

Teehee! What woman doesn't understand what it's like to inadvertently flash her cleavage? Great fun!

patonlorraine said...

LOL :)

Wildcats Wife said...

Lorraine! This is adorable and absolutely cute. I will read this story!

Kate said...

She's got something he wants and he's rescuing her- sounds like the perfect set-up! Very nice six.

Corinne Davies said...

I love her thought process :) Great six!

Charmaine Gordon said...

Sex rears it's lovely head despite an accident. Good writing.

patonlorraine said...

Thank you so much, Carrie! :) I appreciate it!

patonlorraine said...

LOL. Thanks, Kate!

patonlorraine said...

Thanks, Corinne! :)

patonlorraine said...

Yep. LOL. Thanks, Charmaine!

Jess Schira said...

*sigh* Nothing this interesting has ever happened to me when I've introduced my truck to the local ditches. Very nice 6.

patonlorraine said...

LOL - me neither! But, that's why we write, right?

Cara Bristol said...

Mama always said wear lacy underwear in case you get into an accident and have the opportunity to be rescued by a sexy hunk. Or she should have said that! Enjoyed your six.

Ann Swann said...

Love it! The conflicted emotion about the bras is just classic. Can't wait to read more!

K. A. Laity said...

Intriguing!

A.S. Fenichel said...

Sexy and funny. Great job!

angelaquarles.com said...

Fun 6, I love how in the midst of this she becomes acutely aware of what's she's doing and him struggling not to look, but obviously enjoyed it. Can't wait to see where this goes...

Candice Bundy said...

A woman is always aware of her cleavage, even amidst an accident! It's hilarious but true! Well done. :)

Paula Martin said...

Love this! I laughed out loud at the last 2 sentences.

sue said...

can relate to the bra line - except I usually don't wear one....I like these folks

Silver James said...

Oh, Lorraine. You made me laugh. This weeks' Six is priceless. Soooo good!

patonlorraine said...

LOL. Thanks, Cara!

patonlorraine said...

Thanks, Ann! :)

patonlorraine said...

Thanks!

patonlorraine said...

Thank you, A.S.!

patonlorraine said...

Tee hee. Thanks, Angela.

patonlorraine said...

LOL. Thanks, Candice! :)

patonlorraine said...

Tee hee. Thanks, Paula! :D

patonlorraine said...

That would have been an interesting twist! :) Thanks, Sue.

patonlorraine said...

That's so wonderful to hear! Thank you, Silver! :)

Chantel Rhondeau said...

I just love Annie's thoughts! I would have been happy to have the lacy bra on as well, but the turtleneck thought cracked me up!

Sarah Ballance said...

I'm sorry if this is a duplicate comment. I thought I'd commented but my computer restarted itself and I can't remember if it had gone through or not. (That kind of day, lol). Anyway, I love how he's trying not to look but he's grinning because he already got an eyeful. Fabulous characterization, and just plain FUNNY! ;c)

patonlorraine said...

Thanks, Chantel!

patonlorraine said...

Thank you, Sarah! You've made me smile! :)

Sue Ann Bowling said...

Awkward way to meet someone.

S. J. Maylee said...

so much fun! I bet his grin was something to be seen. I'll be back, I want to know what happens next.

Veronica Scott said...

Yay for lacy bras! At least she has the right lingerie for this very intriguing man LOL. I am so enjoying this story, great six!

Teresa Cypher said...

Love it, Lorraine! This just keeps getting better and better! I loved the quick rethink--the lacy bra instead of the "frayed" sports bra! Who can't relate to the idea of that? :-) !

Patricia Preston said...

Cute six! Love his grin.

Joanne Stewart said...

hahaha! I love it. Very cute.

patonlorraine said...

True - Annie's life never goes quite the way she'd wish. LOL

patonlorraine said...

Thank you, SJ! I'm glad! :)

patonlorraine said...

LOL. Thanks, Veronica!

patonlorraine said...

LOL. Thanks, Teresa! :)

patonlorraine said...

Thanks, Patricia! :)

patonlorraine said...

Thank you, Joanne! :)

K.E. Saxon said...

Oh, goodie! *rubbing hands together in glee* So glad you're going to show us the whole scene! I love both the hero and the heroine in this. YOu have hooked me just with the few sentences I've read the past few weeks. They are both completely sympathetic characters and the hero is sexy as hell. Great work here!

L.J. Kentowski said...

Ohhh… I love this! Yes, definitely keep the cleavage scene coming!!! It's hot and we don't want it to stop!! LOL Great 6!

Cate Masters said...

Poor Annie! Love her wry humor.

Ursula Grey said...

Great six, Lorraine! I love your voice and style:-)

Sarah W said...

The more I read about Annie, the more I like her! :)

Karyn Good said...

Wonderful six! I could picture the scene as clear as day, feel her embarrassment. Plus, it made me smile - in an entirely sympathetic way!

patonlorraine said...

Thank you so much! And thanks for the shout out on Twitter. :)

patonlorraine said...

LOL. Thanks, LJ! :)

patonlorraine said...

Thanks, Cate! :)

patonlorraine said...

Thanks, Ursula! What a lovely compliment.

patonlorraine said...

Thanks, Sarah! :)

patonlorraine said...

Thank you, Karyn! :)

Elin Gregory said...

If she was wearing a turtleneck she'd be even hotter under the collar. You can't really blame Quinn for copping an eyeful, bless him. Nice six.

Monica Enderle Pierce said...

Listen, he's pulling her truck outta the ditch, the least she can do is give him a looksee. LOL!

Jennifer Lowery (Kamptner) said...

LOL! Love it!! She has a great sense of humor!

Joya said...

LOL, great emotion and humor! Thanks for sharing. :)

J. M. Blackman said...

I love moments like this--shows both of the characters and uses great humor.

diannehartsock said...

Very cute! and Quinn's being a gentleman for not commenting. :)

melyndaprice said...

LOL! Her humor is great here :)

patonlorraine said...

LOL. Yes, you are right. ;)

patonlorraine said...

LOL - love your perspective! ;)

patonlorraine said...

Thanks, Jennifer! :)

patonlorraine said...

Thanks, Joya! :)

patonlorraine said...

Thank you, JM! :)

patonlorraine said...

Haha, true! Thank, Dianne!

patonlorraine said...

Thank you, Melynda! :)

Jean Marie Ward said...

Quinn's reaction is so *guy*. Love it!

Skye Warren said...

Love her internal conflict, and described so neatly in wardrobe terms. Well done!

Carrie-Anne said...

Very fun six!

Sandra Bunino said...

Very cute! I would be relieved to have the lacy number on too! Super six!

Siobhan Muir / Meg Palevich said...

I loved her conflicting wishes - gratitude for lace, desperation for a turtleneck. LOL Great six, Lorraine. :)

Heather Boyd said...

Even in a tense situation, men can still grab an eyefull. LOL Great six

Zee Monodee said...

Oh no, the poor, poor girl! Loved your humour in this, Lorraine! Great job :)

Ginger Simpson said...

I heard the seatbelt clunk against the opposite door. Great six... and fun, too.

stormiekent said...

As an erotic romance writer, my mind immediately began to explore the possibilities. Great six.

maeclair.net said...

This is heating up nicely. Well done!

Pippa Jay said...

Lol, at least it was clean underwear. :-P