These six sentences are also from the prologue of the same Work in Progress, Unavoidable Legacies, as the last two SSS postings. As I mentioned last week and the week before, this scene involves secondary characters, whose activities set the rest of the book in motion. This excerpt follows last week's, where John was feeling guilty about Grace's car accident. He is still standing on the side of the road, watching the emergency crews look for Grace in the lake.
They all believed Grace was dead, that her delicate body was suspended somewhere beyond their reach. God, please let them find her before she was blue and bloated with a ghastly open-mouthed yawn.
A cry from one of the boats broke across the water – someone had found...something. John watched without blinking as the crew pulled her lifeless body out of the lake. Crisp grief speared through him, sending hot pain down his left arm and a tight ache across his chest. Welcoming it, he slid to the frozen earth in silence.
*****One of my rewrite options has John and Grace return as ghosts to play matchmakers for their grown children. I have to play with that idea some more and see how that might work...
This might be the last excerpt from this WIP for a while. I've decided this story needs a lot of revision, so that'll take some time. Also, I think it might be time to switch up my SSS to something that isn't quite so sombre.
Thank you to everyone for stopping by and commenting on my post again last week! I appreciate it! Your comments have me thinking about my rewrites and directions for moving forward. Also, a huge thank you to the Six Sentence Sunday organizers - I think you are rockstars for coming up with this idea and generously sharing the opportunity with others. :)
To find out more about Six Sentence Sunday and the other fabulous participants go to http://www.sixsunday.com/. There are some great snippets!
I'd love to hear from you about this excerpt! What do you think?