Introduction to these sentences: This excerpt follows directly after my last SSS post. Driving on country roads for the first time, Annie loses control of her truck and drives into a ditch. Quinn sees her accident, so he stops to help. Both Annie and her truck are fine, but when she tries to get out of the truck, her door hits the steep slope of the ditch. She can't open the door wide enough to squeeze through - she's trapped. Quinn has just told her he'll pull her truck out of the ditch, and Annie has decided she wants out of the truck first. Quinn's suggested she crawl through the window, assuring her he'll make sure she doesn't fall. When her foot gets caught on something, Annie looks down and realizes that her position, crawling on the seat toward him, is displaying her cleavage to Quinn. Last time, she wished for a turtleneck.
Here are the six:
Truck windows weren't meant to be used as doors, at least not by her and not while she was still clutching her shirt closed. She'd managed to get her upper body through the opening, but when she tried to pull her leg around, her knee kept hitting the steering wheel.
How did they do this on The Dukes of Hazzard? Would it be better if she backed toward the window bum first?
When she started to crawl back inside to reorient herself, Quinn cleared his throat and she froze.
Then he touched her.
As I said last time, I'll post more excerpts from this scene over the next couple of Sundays, at least until Annie has two feet on the ground!
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106 comments:
I immediately thought of Dukes of Hazzard from the intro. I can feel all kinds of tension in this six. Well done! :)
Dukes of Hazzard! - Now that brings back great memories.
LOL -- I love her tenacity. And the Dukes of Hazzard line was perfect. Now *I* am trying to figure out how they did that. :)
So funny, I can just imagine it!
Thank you, Jessica! :) Glad you felt tension - it is certainly a tense moment for Annie!
I was going to watch some YouTube clips yesterday... but decided maybe some things are better left as memories. LOL
Thanks, Donna! Annie isn't the most agile of people, but I suppose she does have tenacity. :)
Thanks, Paula! I'm glad you liked it. :)
Oh you can't stop there! that's not fair! lol Seriously, fantastic six. I'm hooked!
Awesome six! Crawling through a truck window does not sound easy!
LOL. Thank you, Joanne! Your comment makes me smile! :)
I think he's enjoying her being stuck! Gives him time to "analyze" her assets. LOL. Oh, these two are a mess, a mess in deed.
Thanks so much, Krystal! :)
LOL! Annie's a mess, that's for sure. And, yes, then there is Quinn... :)
Oh, she's in trouble all right. Can't wait to see what happens next. Great six!
LOL. Thanks, Kate! :)
What a hoot! I love this whole situation. Funny and simply steaming, too! Hey, did you say yet why she can't use the passenger side door to get out? Just a stray thought... Great six!!
oooh, you're such a tease! Touched her where?? Great 6, I chuckled on the Dukes of Hazzard comment :)
What a heck of a place to leave things! Arrgh! I hope you follow up with this one next week. Oh, and loved the Dukes reference. Wonderful touch of humor!
The Dukes of Hazzard reference cracked me up. My husband loves that show.
Wonder what Quinn is getting an eyeful of now. Great six, Lorraine!
Inquiring minds wish to know WHERE he touched her. ;)
Wow, I love the Dukes of Hazzard reference! What a blast from the past! You voice is AMAZING, and I can't wait to follow this story :) and thanks for the nice welcome to SSS :)
Uh oh, all I can think of now is, what can he see of her um, assets, now? Hahaha! And yes, WHERE does he touch her?
I've been thinking Dukes of Hazzard at various points here inagoodway LOL. I love this story - well done six!
I had to LOL because my six-year-old daughter is a HUGE "Dukes" fan and watches the DVDs ALL the time. I love the reference! And it sounds like that was one heck of a touch ... can't wait to see where it leads!
uh oh - they're both goners now - doesn't matter where he touched her...
The poor girl! She's really in a jam.
It's just the right amount of meanness not to tell us where he touched her. It keeps me hooked. :)
lol! This just keeps getting better and better, Lorraine! Love the reference to the Dukes of Hazzard. :-)
Now I'm wondering what she's flashing to make him clear his throat.
Ooooh, you can't leave us here!!! :)
I think trucks back in the Dukes of Hazzard times had a lot more room for maneuvers!
Now you've got me trying to remember what kind of car the General Lee was. A Dodge Charger? Love your six. I'm sure she'll get out with a little help from a friend.
LOL! What a great visual. Charming description of her attempt to get out. Great six, Lorraine! :)
Gah! Where? WHERE? Great cliffhanger. :)
Lorraine, this is such a terrific scene. I can't wait to get here each Sunday to see what's going to happen next! Awesome six this week.
I love her sense of modesty. It's very appealing!! I can picture it all so clearly. Wonderful six!
OMG!!! You had me rolling with the DOH reference and then I had to hold my breath when he touched her! Now I'm stuck in this "holding breath" position until I get to read more! Not fair Lorraine! Not fair at all! Great 6!
OMG, the Dukes of Hazzard! I *always* wondered that, too! I love the situation you've gotten her into.
The humor that comes through makes your writing so much fun to read!
LOL. Thanks! And, thanks for mentioning it on Twitter! :)
I skipped over the part about the passenger door in the SSS posts, but she can't get out of it either.
Haha! You're the first to ask that!
LOL. Thanks, Mae! :)
Thanks, Kate! She's still trying to keep her shirt closed, but I think she'll have to make a decision about that soon. ;)
Tune in next week... and I'll probably mention something... maybe. LOL. ;)
Thank you, Lee Ann! What a wonderful compliment! :)
Thanks, Candice, your comment made me laugh! :)
Thank you, Veronica! I'm glad you are enjoying it! :)
LOL. God, I haven't seen the show in *years* but... sigh... :)
You might be right, Sue! LOL
It is taking a while to get her out of the truck, isn't it? :)
LOL. Thanks, DasNuk!
Thanks so much, Teresa! :)
Oh, delicious. You know how to end on a hook, girl.
I love the way your mind works... but she is trying desperately not to flash him. :) Though I suspect she won't have a choice soon...
LOL! I promise to be back next week.
Aha! That would explain it! ;)
Yes, I think it was a Dodge Charger. I remember my nephew bemoaning the wrecking of so many cars.
Thanks, Patricia! Yes, Annie does need a little help.
Thanks so much, Joya! :)
*Tee hee* Thanks, Stephanie. :)
Thank you, Silver! What a wonderful compliment! :)
Thanks, Karyn! I'm glad you liked it. :)
That is wonderful to hear! Thanks, LJ. Yesterday when I posted this I didn't think I was being so mean... LOL. :)
LOL. Thanks, Monica! :)
Aw, thanks, Casey! :)
LOL. Thanks, Skye! :) (As do you!)
I love the name Quinn! The last line leaves me wanting more, more, more! Great six!
Amazing six, Lorraine. Loved the reference to Dukes of Hazzard;-) Loved this six!
Fun snippet! Great reference to The Dukes of Hazzard! Guess she needed the General Lee instead of a truck. LOL Can't wait for these two to meet eye to eye. Even more sparks will fly. :)
I'm so glad you are continuing with this scene again this week. It's so much fun. You keep leaving me wanting the next 6 right NOW :)
Thanks, Jennifer! :) *grin*
Aw, thanks, Ursula! :)
LOL. Thanks, Jenna! :)
Thanks, SJ! I'm glad you are enjoying them. :)
Considering how uptight she's been for the past few six, I can't wait to see how she reacts to an actual touch!
Great way to add a little humor to a complicated moment for your heroine. Loved it and I'll be back for more.
I love the Dukes of Hazzard reference here. It painted the perfect visual for this six!
Heh! I don't think Annie's got any choice but to give him an eyeful of *something*. He sounds like he's a gentleman, though.
LOL. She is a bit of an uptight girl, isn't she?
Thanks, Ginger! I'm glad you like it.
Thank you, Melynda! :)
LOL. True, the choice isn't really there, is it? Annie just doesn't know it yet. :)
I love this scene, especially the last line!
It's about time he helps her! I can just see him laughing inside but trying to keep a straight face. Really enjoying her discomfort!
So much fun in a difficult position. Thanks.
Bet he's enjoying her predicament.
Thanks, Sandra! :)
She has been struggling for a bit, hasn't she? :) He'll help if she lets him.
Thanks, Charmaine! :)
He's let a grin or two escape... ;)
I have a feeling he's enjoying himself more than she is lol
I love the foreshadowing of that last line. Poor Annie, this is such a horrible predicament for her to find herself stuck it!
Now the burning question is where he touched her. LOL Great six.
Tonya, I think you are right! LOL
:) Thanks, Chantel! Annie isn't used to being touched, so...
LOL. Thanks, Heather! :)
I love the awkward teasing feel between them. And unlike the teasing being done by the author, Annie's feels unintentional! LOL
Happy to meet you and your characters through Six Sentence Sundays!
~Joyce
Still loving the predicament she's in. I just can't wait to see how her problem is resolved, as it is getting more complicated by the minute. Bum first? Yes, let's try that one next...;)
I love the way this scene is coming together. Very nice six. I can't wait to read more.
Thanks, Joyce! Happy to meet you too! :)
LOL. Thanks, JM! :)
Thanks, Jess! :)
Oh, man. What a place to end this!
It's all sounding very undignified! :D
*grin* Thanks for stopping by, Eleri! :)
Yes, I think Annie would agree. :)
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