Saturday, May 12, 2012

Six Sentence Sunday - All That Glitters #6

This is another snippet from my work in progress, ALL THAT GLITTERS. (Other snippets from this story can be found here.)

Introduction to these sentences: This excerpt follows directly after my last SSS post. Driving on country roads for the first time, Annie loses control of her truck and drives into a ditch. Quinn sees her accident, so he stops to help. Both Annie and her truck are fine, but when she tries to get out of the truck, her door hits the steep slope of the ditch. She can't open the door wide enough to squeeze through - she's trapped. Quinn has just told her he'll pull her truck out of the ditch, and Annie has decided she wants out of the truck first. Quinn's suggested she crawl through the window, assuring her he'll make sure she doesn't fall.  Last time, she was struggling to get out with her upper body hanging out the window.  She froze when he touched her.

Here are the six (Annie speaks first):


          "What are you doing?" 
          Annie jerked away from him but, given her position, she couldn't get far. Ignoring her question, Quinn stepped closer and reached for her waist again.  She tensed as the warmth of his large hands seeped through the thin cotton shirt to her skin.
          "Relax."  When he spoke, his breath tickled her neck, and she instinctively leaned forward. 


Annie is almost out of the truck.  And, like I said last week, I'll continue to post from this scene until her feet are on the ground.  With only six sentences at at time, this seems to be taking a loooong time. 
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78 comments:

Alix Cameron said...

Great intimacy weaved through your six, well done!

Kylie Scott said...

Lovely, Lorraine. I'm really enjoying how this is playing out!

Teresa Cypher said...

This is heating up, Lorraine. Excellent six. I am so enjoying the continuity of this scene from one week to the next :-)

patonlorraine said...

Thank you, Alix! :)

patonlorraine said...

Thank you, Kylie! It is fun choosing 6 sentences from this scene every week.

patonlorraine said...

Thank you, Teresa! Yes, I guess it is getting a little warmer... :)

Heather Boyd said...

Nice tension. Great six.

patonlorraine said...

Thank you, Heather!

Wildcats Wife said...

I love this story, these characters. She's in a mighty fine predicament and he has come to "save the day" --- sort of! Lol. Charming.

patonlorraine said...

Aw, thanks, Carrie! :) I'm glad you are enjoying it.

Ruthie said...

I like that "relax" -- as if! Great six.

Jess Schira said...

I'm having a great time watching this scene develop :) It's amazing how much tension can be created with one simple word. Great job!

Jessica Subject said...

I love all of the sexual tension here, while he's trying to help her. Great six! :)

Kate said...

Nice! More please! Great six, Lorraine. :)

Donna Cummings said...

I almost don't want her to ever get out of the truck! This is great -- I can imagine he's not relaxing too much himself. :)

patonlorraine said...

LOL. You are right. :)

patonlorraine said...

Thank you, Jess! I'm glad you are enjoying this. Each week I wonder if people are bored of this scene yet, so I'm glad to hear otherwise. :)

patonlorraine said...

Thank you, Jessica! Who knew it could be such an interesting situation? LOL

patonlorraine said...

Aw, thanks, Kate! I'm glad you are enjoying these. :)

patonlorraine said...

LOL. Thanks, Donna! Alas, Annie will be freed... eventually. ;)

Paula Martin said...

Mmm, nice. Real electricity sparking between them now!

Tonya Burrows said...

*sigh* I want to crash so Quinn can pull ME out of a truck.

patonlorraine said...

Thanks, Paula! *grin*

patonlorraine said...

LOL! (Me too... ;))

Karen de Lange said...

Aaah, 'relax'! Not much chance of that, I think!

Candice Bundy said...

Hah, she's sooo sensitive to his touch, it's a dead giveaway how captivated she's become by Quinn. I'd like to his POV on this. ;)

Kate said...

Yes, I love his telling her to relax and how she instinctively leans forward. Very nice!

patonlorraine said...

Haha... no, I don't think that's going to happen either. :)

patonlorraine said...

You know, I've never tried to write this scene from his POV. The whole book is in hers. It would be fun, though, to explore that side. :)

patonlorraine said...

Thanks, Kate! I'm glad that you enjoy it. :)

K.E. Saxon said...

Oh, wow. "...she instinctively leaned forward..." Serious attraction going on here. Great six!

patonlorraine said...

Thank you so much, KE! :)

Monica Enderle Pierce said...

Love her struggle between attraction and modesty. And he's wonderfully heroic. (And eeking the work out six sentences at a time *can* make scenes feel like they take forever! LOL!)

patonlorraine said...

Thank you, Monica! *grin*

I guess that's what happens when you post consecutive sixes, hey? But it is fun to get everyone's reaction as the scene plays out. :)

Chantel Rhondeau said...

Well, at least she got the "warm tinglies" when his breath hit her... always a good sign for the future! Nice six!

S. J. Maylee said...

she instinctively leaned forward, I'm melting in such a good way. I love that you are giving us the scene 6 at a time and that each week rocks.

Jennifer Lowery (Kamptner) said...

I like how she instinctively leaned forward too. Love reading more of this story each week! Keep posting!

Jennifer Lowery (Kamptner) said...

I like how she instinctively leaned forward too! Love reading this story each week! Keep posting!

sue said...

yeah Lady - lean forward a little more :D
all in her POV - we gotta talk

Cate Masters said...

Glad she's following her instincts. :)

patonlorraine said...

LOL. Yes, I suppose it is. :)

patonlorraine said...

Aw, thanks so much, S.J.! :)

patonlorraine said...

Thanks for your support, Jennifer! I think I have another 2 or 3 weeks to go still...

patonlorraine said...

LOL! I think she may have to!
I promise more POVs in my next story! :)

patonlorraine said...

:) I think she has to if she's ever going to get free of the truck. LOL

Christine Warner said...

Instantly leans forward...leaves so much to my imagination. Hoping you'll follow up with this next week.

Wonderful six!

Pippa Jay said...

He seems to know what he's doing. ;) Nice 6.

Joya said...

Wow, Lorraine, what a wonderful visual. I could really picture her half in and half out of the car, and him reaching for her. There's no way they can resist each other much longer. Great stuff! :)

patonlorraine said...

Thank you, Christine! Yes, I plan to post another six from this scene next week. :)

patonlorraine said...

At least he seems to know what he's doing better than she does. LOL.

patonlorraine said...

Thank you, Joya! I appreciate your support. :)

Silver James said...

Sooooo slooooow. You are such a tease Lorraine but I have the feeling the end of this scene is going to be well worth the wait! :D

Claire Gillian said...

But it really IS more fun if the extraction is drawn out, especially if there is touching and sightseeing involved. ;)

Sarah W said...

It tickles me that she's not quite out of that truck, yet, but I'm enjoying these so much, I don't care. :)

Sue Ann Bowling said...

Kind of hard to get out of that situation if she's going to get upset every time he touches her.

Joanne Stewart said...

You're killing me, you know that, right? ;) Seriously, I love this scene, and I love this snippet. So many fireworks. Fabulous six!

patonlorraine said...

I hope so! I better re-read and see... LOL

patonlorraine said...

You made me laugh! :)

patonlorraine said...

Thanks, Sarah! I'm glad you're enjoying them. :)

patonlorraine said...

LOL. Yes, she must change that.

patonlorraine said...

LOL! Thanks so much, Joanne! I hope you enjoy the next 6 too! :)

angelaquarles.com said...

The stretching of this out over weeks, where she's not yet quite out, reminds me of Monty Python (in a good way)... But seriously, enjoying these snippets! He's so sweet!

maeclair.net said...

I love the way you continue to build the simmering, underlying attraction in this scene. Well done!

patonlorraine said...

LOL. Okay, as long as it is in a good way. I do like Monty Python. :)

patonlorraine said...

Thank you so much, Mae! :)

Amy said...

I think I'd have leaned instinctively toward him, too! Nice six!

melyndaprice said...

I love her reaction here, and then he tells her to "relax." Very sexy and dominant male.

patonlorraine said...

*grin* Thanks, Amy! :)

patonlorraine said...

Thanks, Melynda! I'm glad he's coming across as sexy... ;)

Sandra Bunino said...

This is getting sessay! Super six!

stephanielawton.com said...

Dee-licious. Hope she follows his advice.

Jenna said...

Looks like she's not going to be an easy nut to crack. But she'd better concentrate on getting herself outta there! Sassy six!

Ranae Rose said...

Easier said than done, I bet. I like the title of this story. :)

Siobhan Muir / Meg Palevich said...

Fun six, Lorraine. :)

J.M. Blackman said...

I'm ready to curl up close, too. Subtle, but sensual and as usual, a lot of fun. Lovely Lorraine.

Father Tom said...

Lorraine, that was fun!

Julie is sitting here, smiling..

Hugs,
Tomxx

Sarah Ballance said...

Her instincts have her moving in the right direction! *grin* Can't wait to see what happens when she makes it out!

Jess Schira said...

Based on her reactions, I think that the crash was fate's way of bringing these two together. You've done a great job with this scene.