Introduction to these sentences: This excerpt follows directly after my last SSS post. Driving on country roads for the first time, Annie loses control of her truck and drives into a ditch. Quinn sees her accident, so he stops to help. Both Annie and her truck are fine, but when she tries to get out of the truck, her door hits the steep slope of the ditch. She can't open the door wide enough to squeeze through - she's trapped. Quinn has just told her he'll pull her truck out of the ditch, and Annie has decided she wants out of the truck first. Quinn's suggested she crawl through the window, assuring her he'll make sure she doesn't fall. Last time, she was dangling out of the window unsure of how to get to the ground from her position. She froze when Quinn touched her, but ended up leaning toward him when he put his hands on her waist. She is still clenching her shirt closed, trying to prevent Quinn from getting another view of her cleavage. Ah, modesty.
Here are the six:
"Brace yourself on my shoulders," Quinn said.
Annie reached for him with her free hand, but it wasn't enough - she was still awkwardly perched half in and half out, only now she had the added distraction of actually touching him. She wiggled and kicked, trying to inch forward. God, what was she doing? Swimming to him?
Closing her eyes, she let go and placed her other hand on Quinn too.
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83 comments:
"Swimming to him." LMAO! This is such a fabulous scene!
LOL Looks like modesty was overpowered by the need to get out. Great six! :)
LOL -- I love the "swimming to him" line too. I can't wait til she's out of that truck!
I love that she just lets go and trusts him.
Aw, thanks, Sarah! I'm glad you are enjoying it. :)
Thank you, Jessica!
Yes, she's *finally* given up on modesty. :)
LOL. Thanks, Donna! I think Annie will be happy too. :)
Thank you, Lisa! Yes, this is a big step for her. :)
Great scene, can just imagine it!
This scene has been fascinating to "watch" week after week. Glad she gets out of the truck next week LOL! Again another terrific six, makes me feel like I'm there!
Revealing six...love her internals and her small fight to stop her feelings and then just letting go.
Her embarrassment is so exquisite, Lorraine! I think we've all been there, though maybe not in exactly the same setting. :)
I love how all of these sixes have been sprinkled with a delicious mix of attraction and awkwardness. I can't wait to see how she reacts when she's finally standing in front of him. Great six, Lorraine!
Thanks, Paula! :)
Thanks, Veronica! :) I'm glad you are enjoying it.
Oh man. She had to let go of the shirt. hehe. LOVE it!
Yes, the swimming to him line is priceless. Great six!
Love her bashfulness. Great snippet in that it shows how she must let go and trust him.
Great snippet! I also really like the end, as it seems like what will be a metaphor for her relationship with him: "she let go and placed her other hand on Quinn too"
Hehe, I liked the swimming comment. Love how you infuse humor so nicely!
Nearly there, Annie! I love the way you've drawn both of their characters over the last few weeks.
Practicality and modesty in conflict--love this scene.
LOL. Swimming comment is great!
Nice scene :-)
I'm joining the swimming line fan club. Poor Annie, she's been stuck in that truck for weeks. ;) Looking forward to next week's six!
Swimming to him, :) that's cute
Definitely looking forward to next week!!
Loving the heroic rescue. And yes, the swimming line is expected and great.
Sometimes you've got to just let go and let the hunk pull you out, am I right? :) The swimming line is golden. Can't wait till she's free. Then, I'm sure she'll find that her position and their closeness is not the only thing fanning the flame between them.
Loving this story and curious to see where it goes -
Well, this is one helluva compromised position you've placed her in. If he doesn't like her after this (and vice versa), it's hopeless. (Oh, and I really wanted to make a snarky comment about fish spawning, but am showing great restraint. Right? ;P)
The last sentence--so symbolic :-) Yeah! She finally stopped fighting :-)
Such torture for a shy woman! I feel her pain. Thank goodness she's letting go, literally and figuratively!
She is too cute. I can't wait to see how she gets through this. Nice six!
Oh, that is a good bit of description. Six sentences is just enough for a taste but we are left wanting more.
So glad she finally just let go and went with it! Bet she'll be glad she did. Can't wait for next week!
I've loved following their interactions so far. And the mental image using "swimming to him" was perfect!
I love the last line. You can just see her going for it!
Swimming to him was great. Super 6 Lorraine!
Mmmm, I'm a shoulder girl, myself. I'd love to know more about Quinn's. :)
LOL! She DOES take a long time to get out of a truck, doesn't she? Can't wait for next week when her feet finally touch the ground. Great six! :)
Love it! The "swimming to him?" line made me LOL.
And now that she's got a grip on Quinn, her shirt's loose again, I'd bet. ;) This extraction is fraught with peril! Hahah! Well done, Lorraine.
Lol! Of course, we know nothing goes as planned... Loved this six, cannot wait for more! xoxo
Love this story! Great six! More, please!
I am sooo sorry I was gone yesterday because I was waiting for the next bit of this. You made me LOL, Lorraine. And now I have to wait another week! You're a tease! ;)
How cute. I can visualize her...hating to touch him because of her emotions, but needing his assistance to get out of this precarious situation. Great job. Look forward to more.
I'm wondering whether things will go as planned. Another fun six, Lorraine.
--Kimberly K. Comeau
Thanks, Christine! :)
Thank you, Sarah! I love Annie, even if she isn't an action-oriented, coordinated kind of gal. ;)
Thank you, Mae! She is certainly awkward... and trying desperately not to acknowledge the attraction.
*grin* Thanks, Joanne.
Thank you, Kate! :)
Thank you, Carrie! :) It was a big step for her.
Thank you, Angela! I hadn't thought of it as a metaphor... but maybe it is. One of my crit partners is excellent at seeing metaphors - I think it is a gift. :)
Ah, thank you, Skye! :)
Thank you, Karen! :)
Thank you, Sue Ann! :)
Thanks, Karysa! :)
Thanks, Sandra! :)
Thanks, Kate! :) I promise... She'll be free next week!
Ah, thank you, S.J.! :)
Thank you, Cara! :)
Haha, so true! Thanks, J.M.! :)
Ah, thank you, Sue! :)
Haha, thank you, Monica!
Thanks, Teresa! As I mentioned above, I hadn't really seen it as symbolic when I wrote it, but I guess perhaps it is. :)
Thanks, Cate! Yes, she's letting go... for the moment, at least. :)
Thank you, A.S.! :)
Thank you, Elin! :) 6 sentences can be tricky, can't they? LOL
LOL. At the very least she'll be happy to be out of the truck. :)
Ah, thank you, Corinne! :)
Yep! It was time. LOL
Thank you, Kylie! :)
Mmmm... shoulders. There *may* be something about shoulders next week. :)
Indeed... she's been stuck in there for weeks. LOL
Thanks, Ruthie! I'm glad you enjoyed it. :)
Yep, that shirt is gaping. ;) Thanks, Candice.
*grin* Ah, thanks, Zee! I'm glad you are enjoying it. :)
Ah, thank you, Jennifer! That is wonderful to hear! :)
Aw, thank you, Silver! I'm so happy to hear you were looking forward to my six! :)
Tee hee, she is a bit conflicted, isn't she? Thanks, Ginger!
I'm not sure that much of Annie's life goes according to plan, but she will escape the truck. LOL. Thanks, Casey! :)
Thank you, everyone! I love hearing your ideas and thoughts on my six each week! You make me smile! :)
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