Saturday, May 26, 2012

Six Sentence Sunday - All That Glitters #8

This snippet is from my work in progress, ALL THAT GLITTERS. (Other snippets from this story can be found here.)

Introduction to these sentences: This excerpt follows directly after my last SSS post. Driving on country roads for the first time, Annie loses control of her truck and drives into a ditch. Quinn sees her accident, so he stops to help. Both Annie and her truck are fine, but when she tries to get out of the truck, her door hits the steep slope of the ditch. She can't open the door wide enough to squeeze through - she's trapped. Quinn told her he'll pull her truck out of the ditch, and Annie decided she wants out of the truck first.  She's had to crawl out through the window, which has been a special challenge for her.  Last week, Quinn took her by the waist and she realized she'd need to brace herself on his shoulders in order to escape the truck.  We left it off with Annie letting go her fears and reaching for Quinn.

Here are the six:

          Then Annie was suspended in the air with her eyes still safely shut.  She couldn't open them and see him that close - she just couldn't.  But her other senses weren't so easy to control, not when his muscles rippled beneath her fingers and his spicy scent teased her. 
          When Quinn lowered her, her body brushed like a whisper against his until tall grasses tickled her ankles.  A heart beat later, she was standing on solid ground. 
          "You can open your eyes now."

Phew!  There, she is out the truck!  :)

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62 comments:

Teresa Cypher said...

Whew! On solid ground! I think her head is spinning, nonetheless ;-)

"...brushed like a whisper..."

"...tall grasses tickled her ankles."

Nice! Pulled me right into the scene :-)

Elin Gregory said...

LOL, glad you got her out of there finally! and in such style too. You've used some very nice phrases and that 'brushed like a whisper' bit is oddly erotic, bearing in mind that the contact isn't sexual in nature. Very nice.

Jessica Subject said...

Wow, that was sexy without even being in the act! Great six! :)

Jess Schira said...

She might be free of the truck, but something tells me that her dealings with Quinn are far from over. This entire scene has continued to amaze me through the weeks. Excellent job!

patonlorraine said...

Aw, thank you, Teresa!

Yes, on solid ground! Finally. :) And you may be right about her head spinning.

L.J. Kentowski said...

Hot! If I were her, I might just want to be trapped again if it meant being rescued that way!! Great 6!

Donna Cummings said...

This has been a great series of snippets, really developing the physical awareness and attraction. I love how Quinn is so aware of all the things she's trying to keep hidden. Very nice!

Cara Bristol said...

Another enjoyable six. Looking forward to what happens now that she's freed.

DasNuk said...

Can't wait to find out what happens next.. Another great six! :)

Joanne Stewart said...

I can't wait to find out what happens next, either. Fabulous six!

Karen de Lange said...

Oh, can Quinn lift me out of a car wreck please? And 'brushed like a whisper' is fab. :)

Silver James said...

Yay for being on solid ground, though I have the feeling her world is about to tilt. ;) Great six, Lorraine!

A.S. Fenichel said...

Great six. I love this girl. She's so funny inside her head. LOL.

K.E. Saxon said...

Yep, lots of heat between these two. Love this! Great six!!

Alix Cameron said...

Great writing!

Kate said...

So glad she finally got out of the truck after all those weeks. ;) Palpable connection she's got. Do we get to find out if he's got one too? Awesome six, Lorraine!

Karyn Good said...

Wonderful six! Can't wait to find out what comes next!

sue said...

absoulutly love this story --it's unique in its own way but couldn't tell you how

Wildcats Wife said...

You know I love these two lots! This snippet is sweet as a Texas peach pie!

Veronica Scott said...

Finally out of that darn truck - now OTHER things can happen LOL. Really enjoying this story and these characters - great six!

Paula Martin said...

She's finally out, and now I want to know what happens next!

Mae Clair said...

Love the sensory input we get from her in this. Just delicious. Perfect place to end it, because next week she's going to open her eyes and they'll be face to face at last. Can't wait!!!

nomimccabe.com said...

I could envision the scene perfectly. Great six :)

S. J. Maylee said...

the whisper, the grasses, his line...there is so much to love here. I'm glad she's finally got her feet somewhat on the ground ;)

Kate said...

Its taken a while to get her there but it's good to see her on solid ground...how long will it last though? Great six, Lorraine!

Candice Bundy said...

Hmm, out of the truck, and into Quinn's arms! Fantastic visuals, Lorraine! :)

Casey said...

My gosh, her feet have touched down! What a fun effort it's been watching Annie escape from that truck.

--Kimberly K. Comeau

Sue Ann Bowling said...

I loved this escape.

patonlorraine said...

LOL. Yes, she is finally free. :)

patonlorraine said...

Tee hee. Thanks. :)

Sarah Ballance said...

I am positively melting right now. I love this!

patonlorraine said...

Aw, thanks, Jess!
And - Very perceptive! Annie will certainly have something more to do with Quinn. :)

patonlorraine said...

*grin*
Thanks, LJ.

patonlorraine said...

Aw, thanks so much, Donna! :) And he is in tune with her, isn't he?

patonlorraine said...

Thank you, Cara! :)

patonlorraine said...

Thanks, Daniela! :)

patonlorraine said...

Thank you, Joanne! :)

patonlorraine said...

Tee hee... I think he should sell tickets. ;)
Thanks, Karen.

patonlorraine said...

LOL. Thanks, Silver! :)

patonlorraine said...

Aw, thanks, AS! Annie is one of my faves. :)

patonlorraine said...

Thanks, KE! There is more there than I had anticipated. I guess sometimes that happens. LOL

patonlorraine said...

Thank you, Alix! :)

patonlorraine said...

Tee hee. Thanks, Sarah! :)

patonlorraine said...

Thank you, Sue Ann!

patonlorraine said...

LOL. Yes, it has been a while. ;) Thanks, Kimberly.

patonlorraine said...

*grin* Thank you, Candice.

patonlorraine said...

Thanks, Kate! I'm not sure yet what I'm posting next week... ;)

patonlorraine said...

Thank you so much, Karyn! :)

patonlorraine said...

Aw, thanks, Sue! :) That is lovely to hear.

patonlorraine said...

LOL! Thanks, Carrie! :) (Okay - now I'm craving peach pie...)

patonlorraine said...

LOL! :) Thanks, Veronica!

patonlorraine said...

Yep! Finally free! :) I'm not sure what I'm posting next week...

patonlorraine said...

Aw, thanks, Mae! :)

patonlorraine said...

Thanks, Nomi! :)

patonlorraine said...

Aw, thank you so much, SJ! I'm glad you enjoyed it. :)

patonlorraine said...

LOL. Thanks, Kate! :)

Monica Enderle Pierce said...

She may be on solid ground, but she's certainly still in danger of crashing!

angelaquarles.com said...

Yay! She's out, but oh my, loved her reaction to him here, well done!

patonlorraine said...

LOL. Thanks, Monica! :)

patonlorraine said...

LOL. Thank you, Angela! :)

Julie Mackenzie said...

More, more! I love this! My favorite line--"You can open your eyes now." Very fun! xx

Julie

patonlorraine said...

Thank you, Julie! I'm glad you enjoyed it. :)