To everyone who commented on my six last week, thank you, thank you, thank you! I love that you love Annabelle as much as I do. Also - I plan to post a Lucky 7 from this WIP this coming week - so stay tuned! Thank you for tagging me, Mae Clair, Kate Warren and Lea Griffith!
Now, let's get to SSS - this is another snippet from my work in progress, SILVER LININGS. My previous posts from this WIP are here, where Parker has just walked into Billie's life again after being away for a decade.
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Here are my six, which are taken from a later scene. This is the first one where Parker and Billie are alone. Parker is speaking first.
“Would
you like it if I said yes?”
While
his question lingered between them, Parker let his gaze wander over Billie’s
body. The soft cotton of her T-shirt was stretched tightly over her breasts, and
the thin material revealed the faint pattern of her lacy bra - just as he’d
first imagined it would.
In
spite of his bold appraisal, Billie didn’t retreat. When her hands dug into the soft flesh of her
curvy hips, Parker smiled. Whether she
realized it or not, he knew she was itching to cross her arms, but predictably she
didn’t want to give him the satisfaction of knowing he was having an effect on
her.
23 comments:
I really like the subtext of emotions you've created in this six. Despite the fact that it's a description of her physical reactions, the reader knows exactly what's going through the mind of both characters.
He seems to know her well. Nice six! :)
:) Need I say more?
This is great! I love how he knows what she's thinking. Great description too. This sounds like a delicious story!
And congrats on all the moving-related stuff. That is hard work!
He seems to know just how to push her buttons.
I like how he knows her so well!
Very nice. Love how you show us she really wants to cross her arms.
Isn't it great when two people reconnect after a long absence and it's like they were never apart?
Very very well done. I love the sense that we're in his shoes. Great job!
Smart boy and really well written
Nicely done, Lorraine! Yep, she didn't want to take a defensive posture--because then he'd know he'd gotten to her. :-)
Now, I wonder what her question was?
Great tension in this interaction. You've shown both of their characters really well.
I love the tension in the scene and Billie sounds like a gal who can hold her on, regardless.
He's lucky she only planted her hands on her hips. Lots of tension here--emotional and sexual. Well done.
Sensual but with tension, very well done. Leaves me wanting to read more. Good look with the selling of the condo BTW!
I'm dying to know what the earlier question was. Nicely created tension in this snippet.
I love this flirty, sexy scene, especially since he knows what she's thinking! Now I'm going back to read your earlier posts.
Slap him! lol!
I love the interaction between these two characters!
Oh, he's a cocky one! Luckily, she's just the spunky one to take him on. You've revealed a lot about both of their personalities here and how they spark off of each other. Great six!!
Ow ow ow! Sounds fabulous! I love how bold he is and how she is not giving in to him. :)
Sarah @ The Writer's Experiment
Thanks, Jess! I wasn't sure if I'd taken it too far, so that's good to hear. :)
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