Saturday, October 20, 2012

Awakening A Witch #3: Six Sentence Sunday

The last few weeks I've been highlighting some excerpts from my historical paranormal romance work in progress, Awakening A Witch.

Two weeks ago, I shared the opening six sentences, where you got to meet Mattie (our heroine) and learn about her pendant.

Last week, I shared six sentences that introduced you to Mattie's creepy brother-in-law and his search for gold. 

This week, I think it is time to meet Mattie's hero, Alex.   Ahhh... Alex...


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Set Up: Much has happened since last week's excerpt.  At this point, Mattie has unwittingly stumbled through a magical barrier... and it is here Mattie meets her hero. 

My Six:

Everything about the man was black: his clothing, his hair, but especially his eyes, which were as dark and hard as polished onyx.  A jagged, white scar zigzagged down the side of his face, streaking vividly through the dark shadow of new beard growth along his cheek.
Mattie pulled her gaze away and glanced at the boys to find Nevin gaping.  The sound choking out of his throat was more akin to a strangled scream than a gasp.  Mattie knew they had never seen a man like this before.  Neither had she.    

Thank you for stopping by to check out my six! I hope you enjoyed them.

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40 comments:

Kylie B said...

Ooh what an intersting description. Lovely dangerous 6!

Jess Schira said...

Based on this description, he already reminds me of Zorro, and I do love Zorro. Great six!

Joanne Stewart said...

Oh, terrific description! A very intriguing snippet!

Anastasia Vitsky said...

I'd like to see more of Mattie's visceral response. What does her body do?

Nice work!

Gem Sivad said...

I am intrigued by both of them and want more. Wonderful description.

Sarah W said...

Ahh . . . Alex, indeed! (fans self)

Can't wait to hear him speak! :)

K.E. Saxon said...

My-my-my-my-my. He sounds like a "wild and an untamed thing" (my kinda guy--aren't I *bad*?) I love the dark and dangerous types. I'm hooked. Great six!!

Skye Warren said...

Using description to build up tension.. very nice!

Taryn Kincaid said...

Awesome description of him. Hooked!

sue said...

More please and thank you

Kate Meader said...

Great description, Lorraine, and I love Nevin's reaction.

Patricia Preston said...

Terrific description! Would definitely want to find out more about him.

Carrie Crain Books said...

Great job, Lorraine. Terrific stuff. He's so alluring and mysterious!

Kate said...

Sounds like a potentially dangerous man. And sometimes they're the best kind.

Monica Enderle Pierce said...

That's some heavy personality if Nevin's choking on it. Intriguing guy.

S. J. Maylee said...

I just drank in his description, so delicious. Love all the mystery here, I want more. Fabulous 6.

J.M. Blackman said...

His description is excellent, but the last line does a lot for this character and made it all work so well. Wonderful.

Evelyn Jules said...

Love the description! I don't believe I've ever seen a man like that before either, and I want to know more! :)

Silver James said...

Oooh, Lorraine. Yeah. Alex. *sigh* I hope Mattie can handle him! Looking forward to reading the whole of this one! :)

karen Y. bynum said...

Very intriguing! Great 6! Definitely want to know what happens next! :)

Sue Ann Bowling said...

What about complexion?

Sandra Sookoo said...

Ooh, really liked your stubble line :-)

Sadie Hart said...

Oh wow, he sounds dangerously delicious. Love this: A jagged, white scar zigzagged down the side of his face, streaking vividly through the dark shadow of new beard growth along his cheek.

Christina Jean Michaels said...

What an awesome six! I love the word onyx to describe black. Great descriptions.

Siobhan Muir said...

Spooky guy, definitely one to be wary of. Great six, Lorraine. :)

Donna Cummings said...

Oooh, he sounds scary! Can't wait to see what happens next with him. :) Nice six.

Frank Fisher said...

Sounds like a freaky guy! Great description of him and the overall atmosphere. Fun six!

Jennifer Wilck said...

Wow, can't wait to find out more about this guy! Great six.

A.S. Fenichel said...

Alex gets the heart pumping, doesn't he? Great six!

charmainegordon author said...

Yum description. We need more! Thanks.

Jenna said...

He sounds hot, and all I know is that he's dressed in black! Can't wait to find out other things. LOL Great six!

gemma parkes said...

What a great description!

Gayle said...

Niiice description! :D

Heather Boyd said...

Fantastic description. Great six.

angelaquarles.com said...

Oh wow, he sounds intriguing and dangerous, but in a good way! Great description!

The Belle in Blue said...

Gotta love a sexy man in black! Enjoyed this six as much as the others and look forward to more!

~Joyce Scarbrough

S E Gilchrist said...

I love the sound of this guy! looking forward to reading more.

Ryan Derham said...

Your vivid description paints an unlikely but intriguing hero. Great six!!

Pippa Jay said...

OOo, this could go either way. O.o

Sarah Ballance said...

O.o What an incredible first impression!