Two weeks ago, I shared the opening six sentences, where you got to meet Mattie (our heroine) and learn about her pendant.
Last week, I shared six sentences that introduced you to Mattie's creepy brother-in-law and his search for gold.
This week, I think it is time to meet Mattie's hero, Alex. Ahhh... Alex...
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Set Up: Much has happened since last week's excerpt. At this point, Mattie has unwittingly stumbled through a magical barrier... and it is here Mattie meets her hero.
My Six:
Everything about the man was black: his clothing, his hair, but especially his eyes, which were as dark and hard as polished
onyx. A jagged, white scar zigzagged down
the side of his face, streaking vividly through the dark
shadow of new beard growth along his cheek.
Mattie pulled her gaze away and glanced at the boys to
find Nevin gaping. The sound choking out
of his throat was more akin to a strangled scream than a gasp. Mattie knew they had never seen a man like this
before. Neither had she.
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40 comments:
Ooh what an intersting description. Lovely dangerous 6!
Based on this description, he already reminds me of Zorro, and I do love Zorro. Great six!
Oh, terrific description! A very intriguing snippet!
I'd like to see more of Mattie's visceral response. What does her body do?
Nice work!
I am intrigued by both of them and want more. Wonderful description.
Ahh . . . Alex, indeed! (fans self)
Can't wait to hear him speak! :)
My-my-my-my-my. He sounds like a "wild and an untamed thing" (my kinda guy--aren't I *bad*?) I love the dark and dangerous types. I'm hooked. Great six!!
Using description to build up tension.. very nice!
Awesome description of him. Hooked!
More please and thank you
Great description, Lorraine, and I love Nevin's reaction.
Terrific description! Would definitely want to find out more about him.
Great job, Lorraine. Terrific stuff. He's so alluring and mysterious!
Sounds like a potentially dangerous man. And sometimes they're the best kind.
That's some heavy personality if Nevin's choking on it. Intriguing guy.
I just drank in his description, so delicious. Love all the mystery here, I want more. Fabulous 6.
His description is excellent, but the last line does a lot for this character and made it all work so well. Wonderful.
Love the description! I don't believe I've ever seen a man like that before either, and I want to know more! :)
Oooh, Lorraine. Yeah. Alex. *sigh* I hope Mattie can handle him! Looking forward to reading the whole of this one! :)
Very intriguing! Great 6! Definitely want to know what happens next! :)
What about complexion?
Ooh, really liked your stubble line :-)
Oh wow, he sounds dangerously delicious. Love this: A jagged, white scar zigzagged down the side of his face, streaking vividly through the dark shadow of new beard growth along his cheek.
What an awesome six! I love the word onyx to describe black. Great descriptions.
Spooky guy, definitely one to be wary of. Great six, Lorraine. :)
Oooh, he sounds scary! Can't wait to see what happens next with him. :) Nice six.
Sounds like a freaky guy! Great description of him and the overall atmosphere. Fun six!
Wow, can't wait to find out more about this guy! Great six.
Alex gets the heart pumping, doesn't he? Great six!
Yum description. We need more! Thanks.
He sounds hot, and all I know is that he's dressed in black! Can't wait to find out other things. LOL Great six!
What a great description!
Niiice description! :D
Fantastic description. Great six.
Oh wow, he sounds intriguing and dangerous, but in a good way! Great description!
Gotta love a sexy man in black! Enjoyed this six as much as the others and look forward to more!
~Joyce Scarbrough
I love the sound of this guy! looking forward to reading more.
Your vivid description paints an unlikely but intriguing hero. Great six!!
OOo, this could go either way. O.o
O.o What an incredible first impression!
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