Two weeks ago, I shared the opening six sentences, where you got to meet Mattie (our heroine) and learn about her pendant.
Last week, I shared six sentences that introduced you to Mattie's creepy brother-in-law and his search for gold.
Last week, we met Mattie's hero, Alex.
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Set Up: Our hero's younger brother has now joined them in the meadow, just inside the magical barrier.
My Six:
The younger man’s eyes grew even wider as
he stared at Mattie’s necklace. She
reached for it again, for the peace it usually gave her, but when Mattie touched it, the pendant slipped free and through her
fingers. As soon as the jewelry slid
from her skin, a rush of air swept over her leaving her feeling
oddly exposed. Her wet skirts pressed against her - suddenly tighter, heavier
and colder. Mattie glanced in the
direction of the lake, in the direction of help, but all she saw was fog. Then the pendant hit the earth with a soft thud.
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30 comments:
And??? Some days six is never enough. LOL That was great!
Uh, oh. I think, were I her, I'd be grabbing for that pendant ASAP!
Oh no! She needs to grab that pendant immediately!
Intriguing. Makes me wonder if the younger brother has some power over the necklace.
Nice six, Lorraine. I've been rather inactive on SSS. This is the first I've I've read of this story. A change up from the last :-)
The mystery here is so cool. Love the pacing of the action. Edge of the seat stuff. Fabulous 6.
One of them better quit staring and grab that pendant! Love the fog. Makes it that much more eerie.
Excellent description. Very mysterious and intriguing.
That cannot be good. She better get ahold of that charm right quick!
just love this - have no idea where it is going which is a good thing. Did the kid have something to do with the fallen pendant?
Love the step-by-step description. Hope the pendant doesn't shatter into a million pieces, though. Fun six!
Not good at all. Interested to see what happens next. Great description!
Intriguing six. Definitely makes me want to know more about the pendant - and the younger brother.
Eeep! Fog can't save you, Mattie! :D What a great six! I'm left wanting more!
A great active scene! Nice intrigue.
That seems like an omen! Great six, Lorraine. It gave me chills. :)
Oh how interesting. Fab world building there. Great 6!
Very ominous. Well done!
I love how you brought the feel of her clothes into the sensory level, and then the fog. Can't wait to see where this is going!
I'm with Heather -- sometimes you need more than six sentences! Lots of great atmosphere here, and sensory details. Nice six. :)
Spooky and effective. I could *feel* those heavy wet skirts - great six!
Excellent description of the change in perception brought on by the loss of the necklace. Great six!
The pendant is obviously affecting her perception, but what else?
Exciting and beautiful descriptions. What a great contrast with the last sentence!
Very interesting snippet :-)
I'm wondering the same thing as Patricia. Did her brother cause her to drop it? And yes, sometimes I wish this were called Six Paragraph Sunday! ;-)
~Joyce Scarbrough
Ooh, butter fingers had an interesting consequence. And the brother's reaction hints at much more too.
Wow. I knew the pendent was interesting, but I wasn't expecting that kind of reaction. Great and intriguing six. I can't wait to read more.
You did a fantastic job with this six. Amazing descriptions.
I tried to comment and have no idea where it went, but it was all flattery, LOL.
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