Saturday, October 27, 2012

Awakening a Witch #4: Six Sentence Sunday

The last few weeks I've been highlighting some excerpts from my historical paranormal romance work in progress, Awakening A Witch.

Two weeks ago, I shared the opening six sentences, where you got to meet Mattie (our heroine) and learn about her pendant.

Last week, I shared six sentences that introduced you to Mattie's creepy brother-in-law and his search for gold. 

Last week, we met Mattie's hero, Alex.  


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Set Up: Our hero's younger brother has now joined them in the meadow, just inside the magical barrier.

My Six:

The younger man’s eyes grew even wider as he stared at Mattie’s necklace.  She reached for it again, for the peace it usually gave her, but when Mattie touched it, the pendant slipped free and through her fingers.  As soon as the jewelry slid from her skin, a rush of air swept over her leaving her feeling oddly exposed. Her wet skirts pressed against her - suddenly tighter, heavier and colder.  Mattie glanced in the direction of the lake, in the direction of help, but all she saw was fog.  Then the pendant hit the earth with a soft thud.      

Thank you for stopping by to check out my six! I hope you enjoyed them.

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30 comments:

Heather Boyd said...

And??? Some days six is never enough. LOL That was great!

Sarah W said...

Uh, oh. I think, were I her, I'd be grabbing for that pendant ASAP!

Lisa Fox said...

Oh no! She needs to grab that pendant immediately!

Patricia Preston said...

Intriguing. Makes me wonder if the younger brother has some power over the necklace.

Teresa Cypher said...

Nice six, Lorraine. I've been rather inactive on SSS. This is the first I've I've read of this story. A change up from the last :-)

S. J. Maylee said...

The mystery here is so cool. Love the pacing of the action. Edge of the seat stuff. Fabulous 6.

Kate Warren said...

One of them better quit staring and grab that pendant! Love the fog. Makes it that much more eerie.

Joanne Stewart said...

Excellent description. Very mysterious and intriguing.

Monica Enderle Pierce said...

That cannot be good. She better get ahold of that charm right quick!

sue said...

just love this - have no idea where it is going which is a good thing. Did the kid have something to do with the fallen pendant?

Frank Fisher said...

Love the step-by-step description. Hope the pendant doesn't shatter into a million pieces, though. Fun six!

Siren Star said...

Not good at all. Interested to see what happens next. Great description!

Paula Martin said...

Intriguing six. Definitely makes me want to know more about the pendant - and the younger brother.

Evelyn Jules said...

Eeep! Fog can't save you, Mattie! :D What a great six! I'm left wanting more!

Skye Warren said...

A great active scene! Nice intrigue.

Siobhan Muir said...

That seems like an omen! Great six, Lorraine. It gave me chills. :)

Kylie Scott said...

Oh how interesting. Fab world building there. Great 6!

Gem Sivad said...

Very ominous. Well done!

Silver James said...

I love how you brought the feel of her clothes into the sensory level, and then the fog. Can't wait to see where this is going!

Donna Cummings said...

I'm with Heather -- sometimes you need more than six sentences! Lots of great atmosphere here, and sensory details. Nice six. :)

Veronica Scott said...

Spooky and effective. I could *feel* those heavy wet skirts - great six!

Jenna said...

Excellent description of the change in perception brought on by the loss of the necklace. Great six!

Sue Ann Bowling said...

The pendant is obviously affecting her perception, but what else?

charmainegordon author said...

Exciting and beautiful descriptions. What a great contrast with the last sentence!

Sandra Sookoo said...

Very interesting snippet :-)

The Belle in Blue said...

I'm wondering the same thing as Patricia. Did her brother cause her to drop it? And yes, sometimes I wish this were called Six Paragraph Sunday! ;-)

~Joyce Scarbrough

Claire Gillian said...

Ooh, butter fingers had an interesting consequence. And the brother's reaction hints at much more too.

Jess Schira said...

Wow. I knew the pendent was interesting, but I wasn't expecting that kind of reaction. Great and intriguing six. I can't wait to read more.

Sarah Ballance said...

You did a fantastic job with this six. Amazing descriptions.

Sarah Ballance said...

I tried to comment and have no idea where it went, but it was all flattery, LOL.