Saturday, June 8, 2013

A Double G & T - Devin's Second Chance #1

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Thank you for stopping by!  I'm excited to share a few sentences from my upcoming contemporary romance, Devin's Second Chance!  

About this excerpt: These eight sentences are from the first scene, where we meet Devin, who is our hero, and Shirley, who is the mother of his deceased wife.

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          When Devin set his frosted glass down, he watched Shirley poke at the ice cubes in her glass with a straw. The clear liquid was undoubtedly a double G and T.  She was seldom without one clutched in her long thin fingers. Judging by the cluster of used straws beside the salt and pepper shakers, she'd had a few before he'd arrived. 
          Under Devin's gaze, she pulled out the straw and set it on the table.  She attempted a smile. Devin waited for her to speak, but she took a small sip instead. She seemed hesitant, which was odd for Shirley. She reached out to cover his hand with hers.
          "What's going on?"

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[A Short Disclaimer: My editor is busy working on the final copy of my book, so I'm sure she'd be mortified to learn I'm posting anything in public yet... but I'm going to risk it anyway.  ;) ] 

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It has been a while since I posted excerpts on Sunday and I'm excited to jump in again!  I've posted links to this blog post on the Weekend Writing Warriors site and the Sunday Snippet Facebook Page, both of which you should check out to find some great authors and writing. I know I'm looking forward to reading everyone's latest snippets!  

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Hmm... What could Shirley want with Devin?  Her behavior seems to be making him apprehensive.

42 comments:

Linda said...

I also want to know what's going on.

Patricia Preston said...

Intriguing snippet. I know you are excited and I hope you have a great release day!

Joanne Stewart said...

Yup, I want to know what's going on, too. And not to worry. I posted a WIP I'm positive my agent would find all kinds of errors in, so you're not alone. I probably shouldn't have posted mine either. I won't tell if you won't. lol

Sarah W said...

Is she in trouble? Is she worried about him? So many questions!

Violet Bedford said...

Yes, this is very intriguing. I'm also thinking I could use a G&T. :)

patonlorraine said...

Shirley is being rather mysterious, isn't she? Thank you for stopping by, Linda!

patonlorraine said...

I guess I did use "excited" a few times in my post, hey? ;)
Thanks for visiting, Pat!

patonlorraine said...

Okay - good! It'll be our secret... ;)
Thanks, Joanne!

patonlorraine said...

Devin wants to know too! :)
Thanks for stopping by, Sarah!

patonlorraine said...

A G&T is always a lovely thing on a hot day. ;)
Thanks for visiting, Violet!

Sandra Sookoo said...

So many questions come up. Nice snippet!

Karen Michelle Nutt said...

Intrigued. I want to know.

patonlorraine said...

Thanks, Sandra! It is always tricky trying to decide on which sentences to choose. :)

patonlorraine said...

Thank you, Karen! Shirley needs to start talking! :)

sue said...

Lovely detail - so she's his mother in law then..

A.S. Fenichel said...

That leaves a lot of unanswered questions. Great snippet!

Veronica Scott said...

And of course now I'm thoroughly hooked, wanting to know what she's going to tell him - good job and terrific snippet!

The Belle in Blue said...

What's going on indeed! And this also makes me wonder why she doesn't reuse her straws. ;-)

~Joyce Scarbrough

Anastasia Vitsky said...

Welcome back! As a non-drinker, I'm curious how she can tell that it's a G&T.

S. J. Maylee said...

Love the bits of character you showed us and the tenderness at the end. Fabulous snippet.

Elaine Cantrell said...

Good question. I'd like to know myself.

Denise Moncrief said...

Yes, indeed, what is going on? Seems like something is on Shirley's mind.

katewyland.com said...

Intriguing set-up. Want to know what's up with her too.

J.M. Blackman said...

I love the way the details work in this snippet to set the scene up--not just visually, but the tone. I'm right there with them. Wonderful.

patonlorraine said...

Thank you, Sue. Yes, Shirley is his mother-in-law... I worded it that way so you'd know his wife had passed away.

patonlorraine said...

Thank you, A.S.! :)
And, thank you for stopping by!

patonlorraine said...

I think I should favorite your comment, Veronica! (If I could figure out how to do that, LOL)> Thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed my snippet. :)

patonlorraine said...

I've seen someone do this at a pub so she can keep track of how many drinks she's had and it seemed like a Shirley thing to do. :)
Thanks for stopping by, Joyce!

patonlorraine said...

Thank you, Anastasia! It is fun to be back!
I'd call it an educated guess. :)

patonlorraine said...

Aw, thanks, S.J.! :)

patonlorraine said...

I think we might learn more next week... ;)

patonlorraine said...

She does seem to be trying to figure out a way to say something, doesn't she?

patonlorraine said...

Thanks, Kate! I'd hoped it'd be intriguing! :)

patonlorraine said...

Aw, thank you so much, J.M.! I'm glad you enjoyed it! :)

gemma parkes said...

Great attention to detail, loved it!

Kylie Scott said...

Nice way to establish characters, Lorraine. Realy liked it.

Willa Blair said...

Nothing like family to complicate things. Good job setting up the tension!

Siobhan Muir said...

Who asked the question at the end? Either one could be hiding something from the other. Nice snippet, Lorraine. :)

Ann Swann said...

Great interaction...easy to visualize!

Sharon Buchbinder said...

Wow. If she does this a lot, she needs an AA meeting. That's a lot of booze. It's a wonder she could hold a coherent conversation at that point. Interesting insight into her state of mind...

Cindy Amrhein said...

Well heck, I want to know what's going on too! Very hooky snippet.

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writerlysam said...

Great scene description! What is going on Devin, readers want to know?