Thank you for stopping by! I'm excited to share a few sentences from my upcoming contemporary romance, Devin's Second Chance!
About this excerpt: These eight sentences are from the first scene, where we meet Devin, who is our hero, and Shirley, who is the mother of his deceased wife.
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When Devin set his frosted glass down, he watched Shirley poke at the ice cubes in her glass with a straw. The clear liquid was undoubtedly a double G and T. She was seldom without one clutched in her long thin fingers. Judging by the cluster of used straws beside the salt and pepper shakers, she'd had a few before he'd arrived. Under Devin's gaze, she pulled out the straw and set it on the table. She attempted a smile. Devin waited for her to speak, but she took a small sip instead. She seemed hesitant, which was odd for Shirley. She reached out to cover his hand with hers.
"What's going on?"
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[A Short Disclaimer: My editor is busy working on the final copy of my book, so I'm sure she'd be mortified to learn I'm posting anything in public yet... but I'm going to risk it anyway. ;) ]
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It has been a while since I posted excerpts on Sunday and I'm excited to jump in again! I've posted links to this blog post on the Weekend Writing Warriors site and the Sunday Snippet Facebook Page, both of which you should check out to find some great authors and writing. I know I'm looking forward to reading everyone's latest snippets!
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Hmm... What could Shirley want with Devin? Her behavior seems to be making him apprehensive.
42 comments:
I also want to know what's going on.
Intriguing snippet. I know you are excited and I hope you have a great release day!
Yup, I want to know what's going on, too. And not to worry. I posted a WIP I'm positive my agent would find all kinds of errors in, so you're not alone. I probably shouldn't have posted mine either. I won't tell if you won't. lol
Is she in trouble? Is she worried about him? So many questions!
Yes, this is very intriguing. I'm also thinking I could use a G&T. :)
Shirley is being rather mysterious, isn't she? Thank you for stopping by, Linda!
I guess I did use "excited" a few times in my post, hey? ;)
Thanks for visiting, Pat!
Okay - good! It'll be our secret... ;)
Thanks, Joanne!
Devin wants to know too! :)
Thanks for stopping by, Sarah!
A G&T is always a lovely thing on a hot day. ;)
Thanks for visiting, Violet!
So many questions come up. Nice snippet!
Intrigued. I want to know.
Thanks, Sandra! It is always tricky trying to decide on which sentences to choose. :)
Thank you, Karen! Shirley needs to start talking! :)
Lovely detail - so she's his mother in law then..
That leaves a lot of unanswered questions. Great snippet!
And of course now I'm thoroughly hooked, wanting to know what she's going to tell him - good job and terrific snippet!
What's going on indeed! And this also makes me wonder why she doesn't reuse her straws. ;-)
~Joyce Scarbrough
Welcome back! As a non-drinker, I'm curious how she can tell that it's a G&T.
Love the bits of character you showed us and the tenderness at the end. Fabulous snippet.
Good question. I'd like to know myself.
Yes, indeed, what is going on? Seems like something is on Shirley's mind.
Intriguing set-up. Want to know what's up with her too.
I love the way the details work in this snippet to set the scene up--not just visually, but the tone. I'm right there with them. Wonderful.
Thank you, Sue. Yes, Shirley is his mother-in-law... I worded it that way so you'd know his wife had passed away.
Thank you, A.S.! :)
And, thank you for stopping by!
I think I should favorite your comment, Veronica! (If I could figure out how to do that, LOL)> Thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed my snippet. :)
I've seen someone do this at a pub so she can keep track of how many drinks she's had and it seemed like a Shirley thing to do. :)
Thanks for stopping by, Joyce!
Thank you, Anastasia! It is fun to be back!
I'd call it an educated guess. :)
Aw, thanks, S.J.! :)
I think we might learn more next week... ;)
She does seem to be trying to figure out a way to say something, doesn't she?
Thanks, Kate! I'd hoped it'd be intriguing! :)
Aw, thank you so much, J.M.! I'm glad you enjoyed it! :)
Great attention to detail, loved it!
Nice way to establish characters, Lorraine. Realy liked it.
Nothing like family to complicate things. Good job setting up the tension!
Who asked the question at the end? Either one could be hiding something from the other. Nice snippet, Lorraine. :)
Great interaction...easy to visualize!
Wow. If she does this a lot, she needs an AA meeting. That's a lot of booze. It's a wonder she could hold a coherent conversation at that point. Interesting insight into her state of mind...
Well heck, I want to know what's going on too! Very hooky snippet.
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Great scene description! What is going on Devin, readers want to know?
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